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PANEL ONE: Back to the Phantom Kid and his predicament: he's climbing up the line to get to the
train track above. PK (thought): Okay, not a big deal, really...just a little further... TWO: PK (thought - cont'd): ...then I catch a passing tr-- THREE: The tracks are shaking... PK (thought): wuh-oh! FOUR: From PK's POV we can see the train heading his way... PK: Aw sheef! Gotta think fast... FIVE: ...His line with the weight on the end is held in the track where the wheels will
soon grind... PK (thought): ...Real fast!... SIX: Below him -- nothing but street. One hand is on the roll of slack from the line which
hangs on his belt... PK: ...Because getting down's about to get a whole lot easier... SEVEN: Long panel of the train speeding by, cutting our hero's rope CAPTION: And just when things look their most grim...
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PAGE 7 ONE: CAPTION: ...they are. PK is falling. CAPTION: PK is falling. PK: Aaaaaaaaaaaahh!!!! |
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TWO:
PK, in a bit of a clumsy panic, tosses the handle side of his rope line out to his side -- holding onto the slack...
THREE:
He ties the slack around his waist...
FOUR:
Shot of the handle flailing through the air...
FIVE:
Falling, with the rope tied around him (and a corner of his cape in one hand)...
PK (thought): !#$*! Oh please oh !$#@! the handle just has to catch -- onto anything...
PK: Pleasepleasepleasepleaseplease...
SIX:
Angle on the handle flying in through an office window onto someone's desk -- the person (working, on the phone, or whatever) is looking up with a raised eyebrow, not so much surprised as annoyed...
SEVEN:
PK is looking up...but he's not too far from the ground...
EIGHT:
The office person closes the window on the line...
NINE:
From outside the closed window, we see the line is taught and the person is simply annoyed by the interruption...
TEN:
Close on PK realizing the taught line...
CAPTION: The young and (so far today) lucky hero feels the line pull taught...
PK: Yeah!!
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PAGE 8 FULL PAGE: Shot of PK swinging, feet out, legs bent, towards the building...with his cape hooked around his belt, slowing him down like a parachute. CAPTION: ...and, the corners of his cape already fastened to his belt, the Phantom Kid miraculously saves himself from certain death... CAPTION 2 (near bottom of page): Yet, amongst thoughts of "Ohmigod!" "Thankyouthankyouthankyou" and a moment of concentration on the searing pain in both shoulders, he thinks: Maybe I should do, like, a quick patrol-thing, see if anyone needs me... |
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PAGE 9
ONE:
Crain walking down the city street.
CAPTION: And while Phantom Kid again attempts to figure out how to get down...
CRAIN (thought): All right, plenty of time to get back for my physics exam...
TWO:
Crain's approaching a post office.
CRAIN (thought): I'll speed in, I'll speed out...
THREE:
Large panel of a good-sized post office...it's like bedlam in there but the line isn't long...
NOTE: somewhere on this page (if not this panel) we should see the time is about 8:30
CRAIN (looking at the havoc): Yipe!
FOUR:
CRAIN (thought): Okay, totally cool...line's not too long, I still got time...
FIVE:
Crain's gotten in line, there are only two people in front of him...Four windows w/postal workers are open.
CRAIN (thought): More windows than people -- odds are in my favor!
SIX-EIGHT:
Small panels; a succession of 3 of the 4 windows closing, maybe have the back of Crain's head (from different angles, watching the windows) in foreground on these shots?
CRAIN: For frig's sake.
PAGE 10
ONE:
Gordo's Grand Pops pulls up in front of the school in a modern Cadillac with all the trimmings.
POPS: Let's go, kiddo! Get yer keister in here.
GORDO: Where's Buba?
TWO:
Grand Pops is signalling in the Caddy to get back into the street traffic...
POPS: No. When you greet me you say, "Hi, Gand Pops. How are you?"
GORDO: Sorr--
POPS 2: She's at the hospital! When your dad's having a good day, she likes to be there.
THREE:
Driving in silence
FOUR:
POPS: What? So now you're not gonna talk to me? You're upset because you didn't greet me correctly?
Gordo is rolling his eyes.
FIVE:
POPS: Kiddo! I'm talking to you. We're having a conversation. You're supposed to respond.
GORDO (thought): No, you're talking at me...and if I respond, I'll get into worse trouble.
GORDO: Sorry. Just thinking about the test I have to get back for today.
SIX:
POPS: Test. In what?
GORDO: Whatever. I have to be back by nine-thirty.
SEVEN:
POPS: A test in whatever? Is that a hard one?
GORDO (thought): Make him stop talking...
GORDO: Nooo.
EIGHT:
POPS: I have to guess now, you can't tell your Pops what class your test is--
NINE:
Thinner panel here if doing the usual 9-panel layout for this page...Pops's car swerves.
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SFX: HONK! TEN: Pops has his hand out the window and, although obstructed, one could surmise he's not merely pointing at the guy at whom he just honked. POPS: Can you believe the nerve-- GORDO (embarrassed, looking down): He had the arrow...you weren't supposed to go. POPS: Hm? Keep out of it, kiddo. |
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PANEL ONE:
Longer shot, Pops's Caddy is pulling into a hospital parking garage, one of those that's several levels high.
POPS (from inside car): The healthcare's gonna only go so far...
TWO:
Parking the car...
POPS (cont'd): ...I guess we'll just move him to a home.
GORDO (thought): Do you even care? No wonder you and dad never talked.
GORDO: Sounds depressing.
THREE:
Heading into a doorway marked "Personal Care Center."
POPS: That's the wrong attitude, kiddo.
GORDO (thought): Because everything I do is wrong...
GORDO: I just don't see how bad it could be for all of us to, you know, take turns helping.
FOUR:
They're walking down the hall now.
POPS: Gordon, listen to me, you're too young to understand all of what's going on with this--
POPS: --it's a little complex...Your dad's getting worse--
Gordo is looking angry & offended by the comments...
FIVE:
They're entering a room where, in the back, we can see a 45-ish man sitting in a wheelchair. An elderly woman stands next to him (Gordo's GrandMa, Buba, she is wearing a hat)
MAN: Who's that?
SIX:
Larger panel focusing on the Dad ("Man") and a sad Gordo.
POPS (next to Gordo, whispering, O.P. if necessary): Who'd ever have thought Alzheimers could set in so early this way?
PAGE 12
ONE:Angle on two women in fancy dress, standing in front of a high end department store...
WOMAN #1: ...Oh, I know! All the talk in the last few days about this wonder hero and that super whatsever!
WOMAN #2: Well, I'll tell you this: I don't believe it for a second! I think the papers make it up -- like the supermarket tabloids!
TWO:
Bird's eye view of Phantom Kid...he's struggling at a ledge, hanging onto his rope line...
Those two women are directly below him...
PK: Ungh! Er! Ah!
PK (thought): Alll-most...I wonder if I can drop okay from here...about 20 flippin' feet...
WOMAN #2 (small balloon & typeface as she is far away): I've lived here since I graduated college, I've not seen a one!
THREE:
Angle on women again.
WOMAN #2: My sister says she saw that, that Conductor man once -- but she also lied about that new dress, the one with the stripe!
WOMAN #1: Oh, I remember tha-a-at!
FOUR:
Phantom Kid has dropped between them.
PK: Whaaah!!
FIVE:
Phantom Kid looks at one lady, giving a semi salute:
PK: Ma'am...
SIX:
And at the other...
PK: Er, also Ma'am.
SEVEN:
As he walks off, they stare at one another, incredulous.
EIGHT:
WOMAN #1 & #2: Aaaahh! Police!! Help help!
PAGE 13
PANEL ONE:
Phantom Kid is running along the street...
PHANTOM KID (thought): Those ladies...geez...what's with them? Like they've never seen a cape! In this city?
PK 2 (thought): And it's getting late -- if I'm not back to school soo--
SFX: SCREEEEEEECHHHH!!
TWO:
Closer on Phantom Kid.
Loud off-panel scream: Aaaaaah! Oh! Nooo! God no!
PK: Oh, geez! Better get over--!
THREE-SIX:
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CAPTION: And a fast sprint over a block... CAPTION: With a short-cut through a high-rise lobby... CAPTION: Up an escalator, and out a window... CAPTION: Phantom Kid makes a dramatic entrance onto the scene! SEVEN: He's standing amongst a crowd...a young woman bent over an elderly black man. PK: Someone talk to me! |
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WOMAN: A taxi driver hit him and took off!
PK: Anyone get the--
PANEL EIGHT:
GUY NEARBY: License plate? No, but he's getting away.
PK: Uh, he's a friend of yours -- or hers?
WOMAN: No! He's hurt, that's all!
NINE:
Close on Kid...the woman and man who spoke are off to either side in the background...
WOMAN: Get that crazy driver!
MAN IN CROWD: Stop standing around, Phantom Kid!
PK (thought): I know, I know, but how do I find someone who's driven off, in one of a million taxi-cabs in Railway City?...And do it before first period to boot!!
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