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PANEL ONE: It's a smaller version and closer shot of the Phantom Kid as seen on the Story Splash. He's leaping towards the street (could be a different angle too). TWO: PK lands betwixt several gang members, sporting their colors with pale yellowish tattoos on their foreheads. There's someone else in-between them too: a young woman. THREE: All the gang members have pulled out various weapons. FOUR: PK is leaping out of the group, with the woman over his shoulders in a fireman's carry.
REG CAPTION: I'm a new hero in Railway City now -- the press named me the Phantom Kid. |
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FIVE: PK easily scales a fire escape with the woman still on his shoulders. The gang members stand across the street, dumbfounded.
REG CAPTION: Wanna know why? 'Cause word got out on the streets that I ran from a few fights.
SIX: Close-up on gang member, holding his gun tightly, angrily.
REG CAPTION: Guns don't scare me. Bullets, on the other hand, make me nervous from time to time.
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ONE:
Exterior shot of East Side School for Young Adults.
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REG CAPTION: I said goodbye to Becky, the fam, lots of friends. To be on the a plane for only the second time ever just to go bere. REG CAPTION 2: It's a boarding school. REG CAPTION 3: I know, I know. It's a groan for me to... |
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TWO:
Inside the dormitory. We see Reg and a nerdy black kid (Crain CRANDALL) who's apparently his roommate. Reg seems to be just moving in, Crain is obviously settled in already. The room has two large bay windows -- they have a corner room.
REG CAPTION: ...But I got a few good things from this. The first is living in a big city like The Railway. Second's a roommate I think I can trust...
Crain: 'Right. Reg. I guess you can, uh, put your stuff where Gordo had his.
Reg: "Gordo"?
THREE:
Crain: Yeh, the jerk who hadda move. You know, 'cause you were comin' in.
Crain 2: ...What's with that?
Reg: What's with what?
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FOUR: (Crain looking at Reg like he's an idiot) Crain: They said it was your mother. That she called to request this room. Reg (smiling uncomfortably): Oh. No, it's just that my...eyesight isn't the best. She asked for a room with the most sunlight. Reg 2: I didn't know they moved someone. |
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FIVE:
Shot of door, or door & Reg...whichever.
SFX: KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK!!!
Crain (off screen): bloody...!
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ONE: long panel...door, Reg, & Crain are visible.
SFX: KNOCK KNOCK!
Gordon "GORDO" Breckerman is off-screen, yelling through the door.
Gordo: Hey bug, let me in there, or I'll pull your nostrils out through your a--
Crain: Learn my name, you idiot!
GORDO: All right, Crain, you perf, open the door!
TWO:
Reg has opened the door. It's a close-up of Gordo -- a nasty lookin' kid. He wears a yarmulke and has on his school uniform.
GORDO: New kid. You're dead.
THREE:
Gordo's swinging a fist at Reg.
FOUR:
Reg, totally unaffected by this, has caught his fist.
FIVE:
Close on Reg, smiling.
SIX:
Angle on hallway, Gordo's been tossed out of the room.
SFX: SLAM!
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ONE: Shot of Crain, dumbfounded.
CRAIN: Oh. Oh. That was tight! He'll kill us both, but...Heh-eh. Amazing. Ah-hoh-hoh!! I never saw a thing like that before. Man, I was watching, and I didn't see it.
TWO:
Crain more serious (or curious) now.
CRAIN: You a wringer, Reynolds?
THREE:
REG: What, like, for sports?
CRAIN: Yeah.
REG: No, "Bug," I ain't no wringer.
FOUR:
CRAIN: Call me Crain...Someone should.
REG: Sounds good to me.
FIVE:
Larger panel: Reg is at the window, he looks like he's sizing it up. You can see from this angle that their corner windows lead directly into some trees, which border on a stone wall, followed by a fence, all of which faces the back of some brownstones and an alleyway. (this panel can be a worm's eye view, up at window, showing Reg through one corner window, Crain through the other, with all the described in fore & midground). This is his obvious escape route to become the Phantom Kid!
REG CAPTION: I was sent here to do some good. The more I think about it, the more weird it seems.
REG CAPTION 2: Railway City, home of The Conductor, the Deadend Defender, Maximum Man...
REG: So, are we allowed to go get some burgers or what?
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PANEL ONE:
Close-up of a burger being devoured.
Gordo (O.P.): I'm gonna *munch* kill that new *rowlf* kid, guys. Really.
TWO:
We can see now that Gordo's at a fast food restaurant sitting with some buddies, eating (the school is in the background out the window).
Buddy 1: So, tell me again how he sucker-punched you?
Buddy 2: Yeah! What'd you do, walk into the room bass ackwards.
THREE:
All four of his friends cackle and motion and point at each other 'cause that was "a good one." In the background, Crain & Reg walk in unnoticed.
SFX: HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!!
Buddy 1: Dude!
Buddy 3: Yeah, bud-dee!
FOUR:
Now they notice Crain & Reg.Buddy 1: Hey, Gordo, man.
Gordo (stuffing his face still): Yeah.
Buddy 1: What's got two legs, lives with a bug, and kicks butt?
GORDO: I dunno. What?
FIVE:
Buddy 1 is pointing over Gordo's shoulder to Crain & Reg, who are ordering their food now.
Buddy 1: I dunno either, but he kicked yours!
SFX of friends: HA HA HA HA!!
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| NOTE TO ARTIST: somewhere on this page, we must get a good look at Gordo's yarmulke -- it should be one of the nicer ones. Embroidered, black or blue, held on with a bobby pin. |
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ONE:
Crain & Reg are heading to their seats with trays of food.
CRAIN: ...no accent 'cause I grew up here. My dad's from South London, we visit, so, yeah, I've picked up a lot of their, you know, phrases...All right, if I said something was "tight" -- my mates'd be lost.
TWO:
Gordo & his buddies are standing in the way of Crain & Reg.
REG: ...It's kind of wh--
GORDO: Hey, bug. Hey, new kid.
REG 2: Well, now, this is the Railway City hospitality I'd heard about...
THREE:
REG: ...We'd like a table by the window, if you please.
GORDO: Hey, the Texan Tumbleweed's a freakin' wiseguy!
BUDDY 3: When you're done there, can I get his shake?
GORDO: So, 'wad, wanna finish what we started?
Note: next three panels, should be smaller, tighter shots.
PANEL FOUR:
REG: Not really. Why don't you & the funny beanie you wear go find your seats.
PANEL FIVE:
Reg, looking proudly over his shoulder at Crain, who has his hands over his face in disgrace.
REG (proud): Heh!
CRAIN (small): shoot.
GORDO (O.P.): WHAT?!
PAGE SIX:
A fist has swung into view and connected with Reg. His tray is in mid-flight.
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ONE:
The boys are back in the dorm. It's dusk. Reg is nursing a black eye with a bag of ice. Bags and food from the fast food place sit nearby. Crain eats his fries, a book is open on his lap.
REG: Well, how was I supposed to know? I never met someone who was Jewish.
CRAIN: Yeah, well, you looked racist.
REG 2: Naw, I'm just an idiot.
TWO:
Crain is showing Reg the book...it's a dictionary.
CRAIN: Well, jeez, here it is. No wonder we couldn't find it -- I'd never have spelled it like that. See?
CRAIN: "Yarmulke, 'yah-meh-kah'...a small skull-cap worn by Jewish males on religious occasions." Gordo wears his all the time though.
REG: I just thought he was a dork.
THREE:
Crain is smiling.
CRAIN: Turns out that'd be you, hn?
REG: Should I apologize?
CRAIN 2: Yeah. This is a small place, and you can be kicked out for something like that.
FOUR: Crain is turning on his computer and his printer.
CRAIN: We'll write you a letter of apology. You'll drop a copy off with Dean Mizzilli and slip one under Gordo's door...and before you say it, e-mail's out -- this has to be formal.
REG 2: How long will this take?
CRAIN 2: I dunno. Why? Busy night planned?
REG 3: Um, yeah, I might look around...
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