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ONE: They're on the roof...Shareen is on a cell phone...Dee and Jessica are putting on
helmets and/or trying to get themselves situated in the small flying machine. SHAREEN: ...Mom! Can you hear me okay?...No, it's not interference it's Stephen's
cometplane, we've got the thing warming up! DEE (small): Did she say "cometplane"? JESSICA (small): I believe she did.
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TWO: SHAREEN: Put Jeffrey to bed exactly at nine-thirty...No mom, nine-thirty -- it's not too late! Otherwise he'll walk into your room in the middle of the night and tell you he's hungry! SHAREEN 2: And I know you -- you'll feed that boy in the a.m. when he comes walkin' in there!...uh-huh. That's what I figured. THREE: Small panel - Shareen looking sad. SHAREEN: No. Don't tell him...I'm not ready...Yeah. Goodnight. Love you...you two sleep well. |
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FOUR:
JESSICA: Ready, captain?
SHAREEN: ...You bet!
DEE: Everyone cool?
SHAREEN: Everyone but you.
SHAREEN 2: Mom's gonna put Jeffrey to bed and stay the night.
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PANEL ONE:
Estab. of LA...
CAPTION: Later, somewhere near Santa Monica, California...
TWO:
CAPTION: A grandmother sleeps soundly in a modest house...
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ANGLE on Shareen's mom in Doc Tech's house, asleep in Shareen's (and formerly Doc Tech's) bedroom... THREE: CAPTION: ...and her grandson wanders into her room, his stomach rumbling. Shareen's boy stands there in his pajamas, grandma's got her eyes shut and is tucked snugly in bed... |
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JEFFREY: Gran? Gran! I heard a noise, Gran.
GRAN: *snort* Shh.
JEFFREY: But I heard it. And I'm hungry. Can I have some Cheerios?
FOUR:
SFX: THUD!! THUD!!!
Gran's eyes have widened.
GRAN (small): His father!
PAGE 10
ONE:
Gran has hopped outta bed, the blanket is still flying through the air. In her big Granny nightgown, she is scooping up little Jeffrey.
GRAN: Okay, Li'l Ranger, we two have to get out of here!
TWO:
She's got Jeffrey under one arm, and a duffel bag in the other...
JEFFREY: Why? What's going on?
GRAN: Just shush, little one.
THREE:
SFX: HMMMMMMmmmmMMMMMMmmMMM
Gran has stopped cold, and is looking up.
In a series of several very small close-ups, we see her (not necessarily in this order) grab food (for little Jeffrey), some clothes, myriad valuables, and some cash.
In the page's last two normal-sized panel, we see Gran pull up a panel in the floor...
SFX (above her head as she opens floor): CRASZHHH!!
We can see Jeffrey's crying now...
and in LAST PANEL ON PAGE:
Gran and Jeffrey are sliding through some kind of tube -- Gran's face serious, Jeffrey's face holding a huge grin (with a tear or two streaming down his cheek -- as he was just crying).
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PAGE 11 1/2 Splash panel: Half the house has been demolished, some of it having caved in, from a bulldozer doing its job. A helicopter hovers above. PANEL TWO: The Hero Killer jumps from the copter. THREE: He enters the house through its wrecked side. HERO KILLER: Hello? Hello there! Oh come on now, I've only had half the place destroyed...someone must be alive! HERO KILLER 2 (small): Don't tell me I went to all this trouble just to destroy an empty house... HERO KILLER 3: !@#$! |
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PAGE 12
ONE: Jeffrey and Gran are deposited in a speed boat (which has obviously been customized) within the underground tunnel. The boat sports a half-open, metal dome.
TWO:
On the cushioned floor of the modified boat, Gran and li'l J stay safe as the dome closes....
THREE:
It shoots off through a tunnel (NOTE: remember, this is LA, any underground tunnels and hideaways will have flexible girders and shielding for earthquakes)...
FOUR:
A time-bomb left in its wake counts down from 10.
FIVE:
The boat shoots out of a pipe, landing in the water just near the Santa Monica pier.
SIX:
The time-bomb is down to four...
SEVEN:
From a speaker in the boat...
DR. TECHNOLOGY: Honey, if you're in this boat, someone's gotten to you and Jeffrey, and I'm probably off somewhere saving the world...
JEFFREY: Daddy!
DR. TECHNOLOGY 2: ...You should be okay now, deposited by the Santa Monica pier. Get to safety, and call me or another member of The Light Brigade.
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ONE: The time-bomb is at one...
TWO: The Hero Killer, walking through the house, feels the earth shake...
(NOTE: the following can either be combined w/panel 2 as a large panel, or shown separately)...
The bomb was just large enough to cave in the escape tunnels below.
THREE:
HERO KILLER: That was no Earthquake...
FOUR:
Close on the Hero Killer, determined.
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ONE:
CAPTION: And, moments later, as the murderer searches the destroyed home...
HERO KILLER: Ah.
He is standing by the still-open panel in the floor...
TWO:
Angle looking down at floor: there was obviously a tunnel, the dirt has collapsed into the form of a closed funnel in the ground.
HERO KILLER: Well, then. Time to phone my..."friends" at Mesozoic and move to the next one. Hmph.
THREE:
Large panel...The girls are flying high above Chicago in the cometplane...
DEE: You did not say what I think you said!
SHAREEN: Yes. We are crashing!
JESSICA: Oh, Chrites! This piece of garbage hasn't worked the whole way here!
JESSICA 2: "Comet"...More like a lemon!
FOUR:
small panel...close on Shareen...
SHAREEN (small): Well you c'n jus' git out an' walk th' resta' the way down.
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PANEL ONE: The comet's heading down reaching the ground fast... SHAREEN: This is gonna hurt!! |
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TWO:
DEE: Well, geez, don't you have a flotation whatchamacallit or "soft landing" gizmo?
SHAREEN: What are you talkin' ab--
THREE:
DEE: Forget it! All right, Brightgirl, what do you have in your utility belt?
JESSICA: Lots of things that glow and spark!
DEE: Just like this deathtrap!
FOUR:
DEE: Jessica! Hold onto the dome!
FIVE:
Dee grabs the collapsible staff from Jessica's belt...
SIX:
A button click and the staff expands left & right, into the seams of the dome, snapping it off the hull of the plane.
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ONE:
They're in between buildings now...falling ever-closer to death...The dome has come loose and Jessica's holding tightly onto it, her hands pressed flat against the inside...
JESS: Ahhhg!!
Dee's tossing aside the shrunken staff...
DEE: Okay, now stand up!
SHAREEN:You said what?
JESS: Uhh, no, no, Dee, I don't think standing's a good--
TWO:
DEE: Dying ain't number one in my book-- stand your butt up!
THREE:
CAPTION: And Dee, widow of the famous Maximum Man takes control of the situation...
CAPTION 2: As she and her sometime "acquaintance" Jessica Jakes balance themselves on the back end of the cometplane...
FOUR:
CAPTION: Dee yells to Shareen, who has tried ever-so-hard to take the technological reigns of her deceased husband's life...
CAPTION 2: ...and, as per Dee's orders, Shareen pulls the stick back -- hard...
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