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Ghost images of Maximum Man, Dr. Technology, Idea Man, & Brightstar hover over a picture of
Dee, Shareen, a reserved Asian woman, and an older white woman -- all of them look pretty hot.
The four are just simply posed.
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TITLE: 4 Angry Women!
Credits:
Writer: Keith Planit; Artist ; Letterer ; Colorist
CAPTION: Four long-time friends -- superheroes -- are dead...and their four wives
widowed. And the trouble is just beginning... |
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PAGE 2
PANEL ONE:
Large panel, continuing where issue one ended...
The gaudily costumed & masked woman, holds a metal, glowing staff at the ready, standing atop a flying machine created by Dr. Technology.
WOMAN: If you two want to get to this machine, you'll have to get through me!
SHAREEN: Oh, this is whack! I ain't got time for--
TWO: close on Dee...angry.
DEE: Woman, I don't know who you are, an' I don't know if you know who we are, but...
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DEE 2: ...I... THREE: Dee has stepped up to the woman, who has swung her staff, pointing it straight at Dee's face... DEE: ...am...in... DEE 2: ...no... FOUR: Dee has taken hold of the staff and flipped the woman, using the leverage the staff gave. DEE: ...mood! |
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PAGE 3
ONE:
The woman lay upon the floor of the roof, her mask has fallen off.
JESSICA: @!*&$!, Dee! You're strong for a little girl!
DEE: Jess! Jessica, you crazy !$@!&! What do you think you are doin'?
TWO:
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SHAREEN: You know this crazy white woman? Jessica is still on her ass... JESSICA: Jessica Jakes -- Brightstar's wife... THREE: Jessica's crying...Dee's knelt down beside her, with a tissue. JESSICA: ...widow. Damn! JESSICA 2: I thought I finished all this crying stuff! DEE: Why? Because you'd decided to become a supervillain or something? FOUR: |
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Jess is holding a tissue to her eye with one hand and pushing Dee away with the other, still on the floor of the roof.
JESSICA: Chrites, no!
JESSICA 2: This...this was just because I had a crazy idea. Thought we'd--
FIVE:
Medium shot of Shareen, who has knelt down between Dee & Jess...
SHAREEN: Work together? Find out who did to our husbands what the Mind Master, the Time Twisters, and our mothers all couldn't do?
SIX:
JESSICA: Heh...yeah. Yeah, something like that.
JESSICA 2: You're Dr. Technology's wife? Irene?
SHAREEN: Shareen.
DEE: Why don't we get up and go get ourselves something to eat -- I'm starved.
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PANEL ONE:
Establishing shot inside a burger joint (The East Side School For Young Adults, from the pages of The Phantom Kid, can be seen in the background)...
The women are seen somewhere in the mid- or background (Jessica is wearing a long coat over her outfit). Shareen sits across from Jessica and Dee.
CAPTION: Three women, grieving, angry, confused, grow silent as they eat -- in Dee's words -- the best cheeseburgers Railway City has to offer...
TWO:
Closer on the women...
DEE: So...can that flyin' whatevah carry all three of us?
SHAREEN: Does it need to? Superwoman here got to Railway and up on that roof somehow!
JESSICA: "Superwoman" bribed a helicopter pilot from Mesozoic, Inc. to bring her there.
SHAREEN: Who are those Mesowhatever people anyway?
TWO:
JESSICA: Just a big, faceless conglom. They created the form of Brightstar for the military originally. And I'll tell you girls something else: I don't trust 'em! I've got a bunch of their folks in the palm of my hand because I don't trust 'em, and John and I have been....had been slowly stockpiling equipment over the years.
DEE and SHAREEN: What kind of equipment?
THREE:
JESS: Hm. Like that staff. It generates light and intense heat with a slight twist. Fits in the pocket.
DEE: Get back to having those men in your pocket.
DEE 2: You bribed a pilot. You didn't say how.
SHAREEN (shocked): DEE!
FOUR:
DEE: What?
JESS: Listen, sister-
DEE: We acquaintences going through similar stuff, but I ain't your "sister."
FIVE:
Jessica's angry now...
JESS: Well, if we're going through "similar stuff," then maybe you've some idea what it's like when your husband's idea of an "exciting night" is seeing if he can destroy ten tons of steel...
JESS 2: ...or seeing if, if, if he can catch a bullet in mid-flight or stop a guy from running a red light -- whatever it is...
JESS 3: ...He's not doing it with you!
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ONE:
DEE: Oh bull! Listen, Dan worked at the newspaper just so he could have access to news breaking around the world, so he could go--
DEE (smaller/whispering): --save people as the Maximum Man!
TWO:
DEE: And when he realized he wasn't really getting the inside scoop on what was happening on the street, he started flirting with good ol' Dee DuBois...
DEE 2: ...knowing that my territory was the club scene. You try to live with it and stay true!...Regrets an' all!
THREE:
SHAREEN: Honey, you the one chose to date him! Almost ten years older than you, and you didn't care because the man was fine!
SHAREEN 2: And I know he told who he really was before you two got married!
FOUR:
SHAREEN: And before you open your trap, you and John Jakes were together long before he, uh, became Brightstar!...
SHAREEN 2: We all made our choices. These were our men. Dee, we both went for guys too old for us. Jessica, I don't know what kinda carryin' on you did, but don't blame him -- you were in that relationship too.
FIVE:
SHAREEN: And that ends that.
Shareen's taking a bite of her burger.
SIX:
Fries with ketchup and most of a cheese burger get thrown at Shareen, hitting her smack in the face.
SEVEN:
Angle on Dee and Jessica...
DEE: I feel a whole lot better now. You?
JESSICA: Oh yeah. But I'm out of fries. Do you mind?
DEE: Naw, take all you want.
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ONE: Establishing shot of a small, old art deco building in West Hollywood, CA... CAPTION: And, back in LA, an old abandoned building in West Hollywood plays host to a man who escaped the authorities and killed the Light Brigade... TWO: Inside that abandoned building... SFX: Bang! Bang!! THREE: In an ornate office, the Hero Killer, sits -- gun smoking. CAPTION: A deadly villain ponders. Our black & white world long ago faded to many shades of gray, but his...his is but all black! CAPTION 2: The killer wonders what to do next as he stares at the dead bodies before him... FOUR: CAPTION: Two men who helped him secure many of the materials which helped destroy the Light Brigade mere hours ago, just across town... |
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FIVE:
SFX: Bang!! Bang!!!
He's shooting at one of the dead bodies.
HERO KILLER: I have done what so many have attempted to do.
HERO KILLER: And, yes, it was particularly satisfying...but now what?
SIX:
He is holding up the head of one of his dead henchmen, talking to him...
HERO KILLER: I've run to my little hideaway in case I am somehow traced to my modest abode back in the valley...
SEVEN:
HERO KILLER: Hm-hm. "Can't go home again," they say. I wonder--
EIGHT:
Close on the Hero Killer.
HERO KILLER: Ha-haa! Yes, oh yes! That's it, my friends! I know what to do with my time...
NINE:
HERO KILLER: ...Now that those inferior "super men" have been dealt with...
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Splash panel:
HERO KILLER: Why not? Yes -- I will kill their families!!
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